Fire Light

Umm... Non-fiction? Very good, just a few grammatical mistakes. "...and grab the hand the reached..." Did you mean "grabs" and "that reaches"? That's all I caught. Pretty well written: sadly, ...

Hmm... Yayness! A Gundam Fanfic! ^.^ Well, this was well done. Not quite very well done, no offense. Aside form what K1Five said, (do you mind if i call you ...

Oops, i was not going to comment because i didn't see any thing wrong with it, but then i saw that it was R rated... should it stop and not ...

Hmm... sweet! One thing, though, in "As they caress me" you might want to add a comma at the end. And maybe chck some other punctuation, but it's totally up ...

Hmm... nicely done! This is honestly the best essay i've read in a long time. One thing, though, in Time stopped. I can vividly recall the force of the impact, ...

Dang, thought-provoking! You should just do what you like to do, and don't worry about all that other stuff! If you don't like to do it, then just don't do ...

Hmm... pretty good! Well, x0xGilmore Girliex0x pretty much nailed it, so that's about all there is. Except the italics: i get the feeling that they didn't quite come out right... ...

Hmm... wow... This is amazing. i actually started to cry, which is really rare. Just two thing aside from what everyone else said: In "I politely nudge a man standing ...

Hmm... very good, very good! Only one thing so far: in this paragraph, (“Dangit,” she muttered, it was a queen of spades. “I didn’t need one of those.”) just a ...

If the internet would work for me for just five minutes, these reviews would come a lot faster, butt… Anyway, here’s the review. Hmm… very good, very good. One thing ...

Hmm... verynice. Well, i can't find anything grammatically incorrect about it, either. i can't explain how, but the entire poem just seems ironic. ;) Anyway, good job.

Hmm... very interesting. Well, aside from what the other three people said, the only thing i could find wrong with it is that you need a comma before direct addresses ...

Hmm... it's pretty good. Well, everyone beat me to all the technical stuff, although you might want to put a few commas in "I see those eyes I see that ...

Hmm... it was interesting. If i might disagree with just about everyone, the way you at first said "you" to get the mood for the poem, then switched to "I" ...

Hmm... LOL! Finally, someone wrote a hiku! Very good, very good! *Mumbles and laughs* Purple Elephants! :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :mrgreen: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant